I love how you started the story with a bit about Andy's long hair and how you got Beckett and Travis in the story.
Concerning Patrick I liked how you wrote about how young he was and how Pete picked up on it. I liked how he had so many nicknames and how he became Pete's shadow and never treated Pete as a superior. I like how he sang but it didn't become an amazing factor of his personality and I liked the bit about the men dancing. I liked how strong you wrote him but not as if he became bitter with the war.
Pete's pov was amazing. You could feel the love that he had for Patrick and how much he needed him but how concious he was of his position. I love the conciousness and the protectivness in him and not just towards Patrick but towards the troop itself.
I am really pleased that I read this story and that you chose to share it.
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Date: 2007-03-08 06:25 pm (UTC)Concerning Patrick I liked how you wrote about how young he was and how Pete picked up on it. I liked how he had so many nicknames and how he became Pete's shadow and never treated Pete as a superior. I like how he sang but it didn't become an amazing factor of his personality and I liked the bit about the men dancing. I liked how strong you wrote him but not as if he became bitter with the war.
Pete's pov was amazing. You could feel the love that he had for Patrick and how much he needed him but how concious he was of his position. I love the conciousness and the protectivness in him and not just towards Patrick but towards the troop itself.
I am really pleased that I read this story and that you chose to share it.